this poem singifys how much i couldnt stand two of my so called freinds when they betrayed my trust and unfortuanly strained two of my freindships (not the two liars). though thats partly my fault i have yet to forgive the two people who betrayed my trust the way they did enjoy the poem.



Your a heartless liar
Its obvious you dont know the meaning of the word honesty
You played with me like i was your little doll,
Well i'm sick of you and your little game
You tricked me, i thought we were freinds
You heartless swine i should of know better,
Your were like a rose that loved showing her torns
How dare you call yourself a freind, after betraying people like that
What happend to the thing people call a heart or do you even have one, i despise you so much for tricking me like that
maybe you'll learn someday if you havent already what goes around comes around and when someone stabs you in the back i'll be thinking its about time you learned a lesson!

(the term stab you in the back means to betray not to actually stab i put this so there isnt any misunderstandings)

Hmmm... As much as I like the content and understand the feelings that comes from having been betrayed, the flow of the ... poem threw me off.

As much as I don't want to be rude, it doesn't read like a poem. The flow (or what you might call the beat) is out of whack. There is no rhythm to speak of, no structure. To be honest, this reads more like a rant than a poem.

i'll try and work on that next time i'm still sorta new to this but thanks for the advice

I like the idea of the poem, but the words really do need to flow together more. It sounds more like you're complaining than expressing your feelings throughout your work. Not to sound mean, but I kind of agree with Lord Jerzi.

I give you points for trying, though. It was a nice attempt. It's better to express your anger/sadness throughout a poem rather than violence. ^^